DP : Ready, Set, Done – A Poem

This was written for the todays Daily Prompt : “Our free-write is back by popular demand: today, write about anything ā€” but you must write for exactly ten minutes, no more, no less.”.
It was a complete stream-of-consciousness poem, I have no idea where the images came from. And yes I wrote for ten minutes… (ok, give or take 15 seconds!). Hope you like it.

A passing chance, as a passing dream
Not caught within this yearning grasp.
A view of beauty never seen,
Nor reflected so in mirrored glass.
The river flows with golden light
As life will flow and drift apart,
And within deeps and dark as night
You’ll find my poor and drowning heart.
Such waves of tears, such swell of woe
A tidal pull of unkind loss,
But as the bitter river flows
All treasured thoughts are coldly tossed.
To take a pause and ponder so
The nature of this torrent cruel,
I’ll take my chance where current flows
And ever be the rivers fool.


15 Responses to DP : Ready, Set, Done – A Poem

  1. loupmojo says:

    Not sure why, but these words stuck out for me ‘The river flows with golden light, As life will flow and drift apart’ An interesting read šŸ™‚

  2. The first two lines really set the mood of this piece. Poignant and haunting. SOC is a great method for emptying and analysing thoughts and feelings. Very much enjoyed the imagery here.

    • Simon says:

      Thank you. It’s a cross between scary, interesting, frustrating and wonderful when this happens. Scary, because I don’t know where these images come from, frustrating because it doesn’t happen enough, interesting because it’s obviously opening some strange channels in my mind, and wonderful because of what comes out!

  3. Amateur psychologists like myself fancy SOC as a means of disclosing what lies within. I’ve had a number of weirdish ones that, when I reviewed, brought on Aha! moments. I suppose it is a bit scary but still worth it when the results enlighten and allow for poetry such as this. If you’ve never tried going for a total SOC piece – not considering rhyme, punctuation or anything else – it’s worth a bash for finding out what’s going on in your own mind despite yourself! Definitely weird. I haven’t done it in ages. Now might be a good time to have another go. Think I’ll get right on that. Blaming you for any tears right enough! šŸ˜‰

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  5. Jules Lucton says:

    Lovely poem. Amazing how you quickly you work!

    • Simon says:

      Thanks Jules – sometimes a piece of work is there, nearly whole and just needs a bit of work. This was one of those times…

  6. You came up with that in 10 minutes! You did such an awesome job of capturing what it’s like to be separated from things you once cherished and honestly I love your commentary on time and how eventually people fall victim of the “flow”…good stuff šŸ™‚

  7. fibee5 says:

    I am amazed that this was a free write. Beautiful words.

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